I.D.O. Chapter Five – Withdrawal
“I Died Once” – Writing Project
by DarkJade
Our next days of traveling, we didn’t speak all that much… But the Sites and Views of Africa were more than apt to sustain me.
As my deep blue eyes stared outwardly, they seem to widen and deepen… Or at least it felt that way.
Minutes became hours, hours became days… Until at last we reached my Father’s estate. I was starting to give up on referring to him as Sam, even in the sanctum of my own thoughts.
He seemed to have business with a dark skinned man that ran the place well he was gone, and so I adjourned to the room I was given, which was actually near a small lake. I seemed to be dragging a bit today, as my bag seemed quite heavy. And I knew that it was not.
Once inside, it was a very nice room, and would more than due. It was at that point that I found myself, in some sort of catatonic stagger, making my way to the waters edge… And it happened.
The next thing I knew, I had most likely collapsed, as I lay their in a flood of my own tears.
Was it my mother’s death? Or the elapsed vigor of the journey… I knew not.
What I did know was I wasn’t going to let my father find me this way… As I’m sure he too is feeling the affects of this “sudden” daughter. And so I somehow rose to my feet, and made my way to the main house.
He was inside a smoking room, with a short drink of whiskey at his side. “Well hello…” with this he rose to his feet, and sat down his paper. “Caught a nap did yah…” this struck me as a curious thing to say, as we had just arrived… But then as I looked at my small watch around my wrist, I realized that I must have been laying by the water for some three hours, and not realized it. I removed the watch and sat it on the end table nearby, for I had no interest in time as of late… Time had stopped the moment I descended into my mother’s pool… And in truth, I have yet to have ascended. He approached me with a smidgen of curiosity in his eyes.
“What’s this on your face…” all slowed down as he reached to my face, and wiped away a bit of dirt near my right eye, the side of my face that had made a resting place of the ground by the water.
I teared up. Now I knew he didn’t know how to react to this, so instead he began to walk by me… I felt my heart sink, but then his hand took mine as he passed “Come on Mady, Tatenda has prepared us some food…”.
And so we went to supper.
End of Chapter Five
- Chapter One -State of Murder
- Chapter Two – Mother No More
- Chapter 2.5 – And Then He Came
- Chapter Three – My Father From Africa?
- Chapter 3.5 – A Diamond Mine
- Chapter 4 – Dream State
- Chapter VI – Taking Flight
- Chapter VII – The 13th Day
- Chapter VIII – Safari
- Conclusion – Stranger Ends
October 16, 2011 at 5:25 pm
Great stuff… love the word choices and how the more unique help set the mood and tone!
Keep it up
October 16, 2011 at 6:39 pm
Thanks ALife
DarkJade-
October 17, 2011 at 2:24 am
Really enjoyed reading this chapter… awesome stuff, DarkJade!
October 17, 2011 at 8:04 am
Thanks Anna
DarkJade-
February 18, 2012 at 10:59 am
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August 8, 2013 at 3:44 am
The story is amazing. I like the locations and the way you are setting up the story. I would buy this book. I’m old school. I want something I can read and touch. Is this in book form? I have three books needing a re-write. I wish I had your skill for organization and making the story organized and worthwhile to read.
August 8, 2013 at 10:18 am
Thank you John, this particular Story just flowed out of me… So has its sequel… Not all do, but this one really has for some reason. Yeah, I have it on Amazon.Com Here http://www.amazon.com/I-Died-Once-James-Mahoney/dp/1477525823/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1375982143&sr=8-1&keywords=i+died+once just under $5
I also have copies here that I can Sign, an Ship out, $5 for the book, and $5.50 for Quick Freight… Not sure how much Amazon’s Shipping is
Rewrites are tough, I work with several Editors, and Rewrite as I do
Thanks for the kind words
DJ-