One Knight (Chapter 2.5) – The Celebration

ONE KNIGHT

A Novel

by DarkJade (Written 2011/Unedited)

Prologue

Chapter One

Chapter Two

CHAPTER TWO (Part Two); The Celebration

Meanwhile, within the Castle, all prepare for the great celebration, as peace fills the kingdoms walls.

The woman sew their dresses, as the returning knights simply sleep. Great feasts are prepared, flowers hung, speeches being written… It would truly be a wondrous night.

Meanwhile, deep within the Valley of Jjor, a small army of dark knights march through it’s windy pass.

Leading the knights is Baron Braug. On his right Ryme, his Adviser. On his left, the Sorcerer Onddos, an older white haired man, with a great scowl upon his visage.

“Is all prepared…” Onddos growled. “It is” responded the Baron.

At the back of the line of knights, there are three young girls, on three white horses, hands bound, and sacks over their heads.

Jade and Tyrions Chambers…

The two prepare, and dress their selves for the celebration. Jade is wearing a crushed green velvet dress, stunning, and a thin gold chain necklace, with a single pearl on the end of it.

Tyrian is dashing in black, with a white blowsy shirt.

“Will you speak to him…” Jade inquires as she powders her face. “Oh how I hate face powder, what is wrong with our natural skin, as the gods intended.”

Tyrian smiles “Yes, I shall speak with him…”

When the evening finally comes, the Great Hall is filled from brim to brim with Lords and Ladies, as all make merry, dance and sing. The king, most pleased, watches and taps his foot as his people celebrate the end of the Great Wars.

At last Tyrion and Jade make their entrance, the music stops, the masses part making a path straight to the Kings throne. “HUZZAH!!!” they cheered as they made their way to King Maelem. Jade blushed, and Tyrion waved in appreciation.

At last they reached the King, who was now standing. “Greetings Tyrion…” he then took Jade’s hand and kissed it “And the ever lovely Jade…” she smiled, and blushed. The King than made his way atop one of the Feast tables, his Royal Guard quickly stepped forward, in fear that he may fall. “I’m fine, I’m fine…” he waved them away.

The King than raised his goblet. “Tyrion… I have always thought of you as a son… And like a son, you have done me proud…” Tyrion bowes slightly. “And I know that you needs speak to me…” he looks at Tyrion who seems surprised by this. “I know this son” the King spoke softer. Jade tugs on Tyrian’s arm, he looks at her and shrugs, for he had not mentioned to the King that he was needing to speak.

“And I know what you would say… You would tell me how you had served me loyally for these fifteen years of constant war… And how you long to leave our Kingdom, and start a life a new with your young wife Jade…”

Tyrion stares in awe. How did the King know this.

“I know this, because I was once you… I too once had a young wife, but as I was King, I had no such option… But I do not regret this… Not for a day” “And our days together, your Queen and I, were lovely… Lovely indeed”.

The King steps down from the table, two of his Guards assisting him. He approaches Tyrion and Jade.

“But this is your time son…” he looks to Jade. “Both of your time…”. The King than waves his hands, and the Kingdoms Royal Architect runs forward holding a large set of plans. The King takes them, and lays em out upon one of the Feast Tables, his Guards move the food aside.

“And that’s why I’ve built you this…” in front of them is the schematics of a Great Keep. “Tananhall Keep“. “It took five years to do it, but by god we did it…”

Tyrion stares in utter shock, at the plans, then the King, then his wife. “My King–” Tyrion tries to speak, but the King interrupts “Do not deny me this my Son… Do not deny a Father his final wishes…” “As I am not dead yet, no… But I will not always be here… And I wish this”. Tyrion is stunned. Suddenly the crowd begins to cheer “HAZZAH!!!”, and all continue to celebrate, including The King, Jade and Tyrion.

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Editing… The 5th Draft – Becoming A Better Writer

Editing… The 5th Draft – Becoming A Better Writer

So my Editor got my 4th Draft of “Chess With Agatha” back to me a week or so ago… And I’m finally starting to implement some of the changes… Some grammar… Some Sentence Suggestions. And then there’s some Story, and Clarity Comments which I still need to figure out.

Once I implement these things, that will be my 5th Draft… And then I’m hoping to grab my Sister (Who Edited My Novella), and have her read through it, and help me with a few things. But she’s very busy, so I don’t know if that will happen.

This is only the Second Editor I’ve worked with, and I have to tell you, each Book I’ve worked on has helped me become a Better Writer. And when I say ‘Better’, I don’t mean Content (Though Hopefully That’s True Too), what I mean is I’m learning things… Primarily from these Awesome Editors.

I’d say I’m about 60% done with implementing my Editors Changes/Suggestions, then it will be on to the 6th Draft… I’m also hoping my Map Drawer Finishes soon too, Lol Really need that map.

Hope You’re All Having A Good Weekend!

Thanks For Your Continued Interest And Support

DarkJade-

My Editor Has Finished Editing “Chess With Agatha”… And, I Have A Lot Of Work To Do, Lol

My Editor Has Finished Editing “Chess With Agatha”… And, I Have A Lot Of Work To Do, Lol

Ok, so My Editor Finished Editing My 4th Draft of “Chess With Agatha”, and as I hoped she’s really cleaned up the Grammar, and some of the Sentence Structuring. I need to implement all of that, but I’m totally down with that.

The real Challenge before me will be making Story Adjustments based on some of her Comments… Now I only Skimmed over them, but this stuff is going to take a lot of thought and focus on my part. Which is to be expected, and I’m totally glad for the Insights… But it is still going to be a challenge making sure the book still captures what I want it to, but also is clearly written.

Wish me Luck

This Next Week or Two should be Challenging and Interesting preparing it for Self Publishing

DarkJade-

DarkJade – Editing Protocol

DarkJade – Editing Protocol

Yes, that’s me in the Picture, Lol

And I know, I actually have a Plan… But I didn’t want to mess with that Text, Lol

Not bad for not having Photoshop… I used Window’s Paint, Lol

This is what happens when a Film Maker isn’t focusing on Film Making anymore, Lol

But in Truth, I have my Final Notes from my Last “Chess With Agatha” Reader, and I will be applying her Notes during the next couple days… I’m actually supposed to be doing that now, Lol

But instead I’ve been messing with this Picture for the last hour, Lol

Blogger Dedication? Or Hard Core ‘Editing’ Avoidance, Lol

Either way, I need to get this 4th Draft Complete so I can send it to My Editor, who’s standing by.

I’m also working on the Land Map for the Book, which isn’t all that big, as they don’t go to all that many areas in this first book.

And when I say ‘Working’ on it, I don’t mean I’m Drawing it, as My Drawing Abilities suck, Lol Well, they don’t suck, I’m ok at Copying things, but not Original Stuff. So I have someone working on it.

Editing Music;

I Will say, I found a few songs lately that I really Like, will be listening to when I Edit, and Posted on My Dark Xperience Music Blog… But I’ll Go ahead and put them here as well…

But first I thought you’d like to see the Original “Mission Impossible: Ghost Protocol” Poster, Lol

Lol

Thanks for Listening/Reading

DarkJade-

 

 

“Chess With Agatha” Ready For An Editor

“Chess With Agatha” Ready For An Editor

So I Completed My 2nd/3rd Draft of “Chess With Agatha”…

It is Officially Ready for an Editor

Save some Changes I might make to the Prologue, or Chapter 1 (I have a Friend Reading the First Third of the Draft, so more changes may come)

Now it’s time to Generate some Cash for Editing

Wish Me Luck

DarkJade-

Iliad (Chapter X) – Following A King

Iliad

A Novel

by DarkJade

Book II of The “Planes Of Ordose” Trilogy

Chapter X – Following A King

THE PLANE OF ORDOSE

THREE HOURS NORTH OF STHORN LIGHT CASTLE

THE RED AND BLUE FOREST OF DOTH

And so we were off…

We were a small group, and we were traveling some six hours behind My Father, King Elias, and his men.

It was Me, Iliad, Captain Riotch, six of the King’s Elite Archers, and now Samyth, the Lamelon Warrior from the East.

Oh, and I mustn’t forget Mondo Gue… Hemmingbyrd’s mysterious white bird, which shows up from time to time, and lands on my right arm.

“Spyr Bird,” Iliad suddenly says to Agatha, as he rides along on his white horse, his head in his book as he rides.

“Spyre Bird?” Agatha replies.

Iliad lowers his book and looks at Agatha, “It says here that a wizard of great age, which Hemmingbyrd is, is often known to take on a Spyre Bird as an ally, and servant,” he explains.

“I see,” Agatha replies, not really knowing what to say.

“You wizards, and your magic… You might try picking up a blade some time, and seeing how that works for yah,” suddenly says Samyth, as he rides up beside Agatha and Iliad.

“Hmmph,” replies Iliad, and his nose goes back in his book.

Agatha notices that Captain Riotch has placed the six King’s Elite Archers in a circle around Agatha and Iliad, while Captain Riotch brings up the rear.

Agatha laughs to herself.

“What is it?” inquires Samyth.

“It’s just… Even with all the known tales of my abilities in Ordose form, men still seem to feel that they must ‘protect’ the female,” she explains with a further laugh and smile.

Samyth takes note of the Archers positions, “I think he might be the one they’re protecting,” with this he points at Iliad, and they both laugh.

“Ha, Ha… Very funny…” Iliad says as he looks out from behind his book once more.

“I am, after all, a wizard you know…” he says with a sneer.

“Sure you are lad… Sure you are,” Samyth says with a smirk, and rides up to the front of the party.

Iliad pretends not to be bothered, but looks over at Agatha anyway, who has become more serious.

“I believe you’re a wizard Iliad… I always have,” she says with a smile.

Iliad starts to smile, but quickly tucks his head back in his book.

100 YARDS OFF TO THE EAST

Meanwhile, 10 black cloaked assassins ride parallel to Agatha’s party, lead by the assassin who stabbed Hemingbyrd.

DarkJade-

PICTURE CREDIT – Rescreatu

Prolog

Chapter I – Home

Chapter II – Matters Of The State

Chapter III – Elias

Chapter IV – The Meeting

Chapter V – Swordplay

Chapter VI – Ambush

Chapter VII – Iliad

Chapter VIII – Giants Of Fire

Chapter IX – Westbound

Iliad (Chapter IX) – Westbound

Iliad

A Novel

by DarkJade

Book II of The “Planes Of Ordose” Trilogy

Chapter IX – Westbound

THE PLANE OF ORDOSE

STHORN LIGHT CASTLE

Outside the gates of Sthorn Light Castle, King Elias stands besides his white steed, Coran, and speaks to his daughter Agatha.

Also outside the gates are Prince Morr, 20 Sthorn Archers, and 10 of the King’s Elite Guard.

The King is wearing golden red armor, that appears almost to have moving fire within its metal.

And his sword’s handle almost seems to have a white glow.

“And so no sooner than you have returned, I am departing,” he says to Agatha as he kisses her cheek.

She in turn holds him tightly.

“I’m beginning to feel as though I’ve lived here father… Like Agamemnon told me, this place was once my home,” she says with tears coming to her eyes.

“It does my heart well to hear it,” he says as he mounts Coran. “Still, I wish I could have spent some more time with you.”

“It’s alright father… It is what it is to be King,” she replies looking up at him upon his horse, and holding onto one of his hands.

“True indeed. And good that you know this already… As someday it will be you that rules Sthorn,” he adds. “I leave you in command of Sthorn Light Castle, and the Kingdom of Sthorn.” he says as he turns his horse away. “Guard it well,” are his last words as he rides off, his men following in tow.

“I shall father,” Agatha replies.

Her eyes than lock with Prince Morr’s, who bows slightly, and rides off.

HEMMINGBYRD’S TOWER CHAMBERS

The Blue Wizard Hemmingbyrd sits in a chair, looking out his window, with his white bird Monto Gue on his arm.

Iliad comes in, holding a large dark blue velvet covered book under his arms.

“You called my Lord,” speaks Iliad.

Hemmingbyrd sends his bird out the window, and turns towards Iliad.

“Oh good… Come, sit, sit,” he says, and Iliad sits in the nearby chair.

“I see you’ve found the book of Lomahy, studying it?” he asks.

“Yes my Lord, as you have suggested,” Iliad replies.

“And?” asks Hemmingbyrd.

“It is… Amazing,” replies Iliad with a half smile.

Hemmingbyrd smiles with relieved satisfaction “Good… Good.”

Hemmingbyrd then weakly rises, and makes for his bed.

Iliad assists him.

Once under his blanks, he speaks more “And have you chosen your school of magic?”

“Not as of yet… But I will most hastily, I promise,” replies Iliad.

“Good… Good. As a Common Mage you will only be so powerful. And should you run into the one who ordered this,” Hemmingbyrd points towards the wound on his side, “They will be much too powerful for you.”

“I see,” replies Iliad.

“This is why you must choose quickly, and begin your focused study,” continues Hemmingbyrd, whose eyes then begin to close, as he suddenly requires rest.

Iliad starts to stand, but Hemmingbyrd grabs his arm “Choose wisely Iliad! Let not your ego misguide you.”

Iliad pats Hemmingbyrd’s hand “I shall choose wisely… Old one, ” and with this they both laugh a bit, then Hemmingbyrd falls to sleep.

OUTSIDE THE CASTLE GATES

Agatha, after watching her father and his men ride off, sits outside the castle pensively, sitting upon a large rock… But just as she rises, and walks back towards the castle, she hears a horse approaching.

She turns to see a golden warrior, dark brown caped, with shoulder length sandy blond hair.

He raises his hand in greetings as he approaches, and brings his horse to a halt, “Greetings from the Warriors of Lamelon… I am Samyth… I’ve come to aid you in your quest,” he speaks with a green eyed twinkle in his eyes.

Just then Hemmingbyrd’s white bird Mondo Gue swoops down in a blaze of white light, and lands upon Agatha’s arm.

“Aye… This is the bird that has requested our coming,” finishes the warrior.

DarkJade-

PICTURE CREDIT – Vincente

Prolog

Chapter I – Home

Chapter II – Matters Of The State

Chapter III – Elias

Chapter IV – The Meeting

Chapter V – Swordplay

Chapter VI – Ambush

Chapter VII – Iliad

Chapter VIII – Giants Of Fire

Chapter VIII – Giants Of Fire

Chapter X – Following A King